Ralph
they are okay I wish they were a bit more helpful but I can not complain because they are young and enjoy swimming and building castles out of sand. but I can wish though that they were useful towards things such as building shelter and hunting
Why do you all paint your faces? What does this foreshadow? How do you feel when your face is painted?
I did not paint my face I was standing on the shore screaming my head of as the ship receded into the distance
Why doesn’t the passing ship see you on the island?
because the hunters let the fire die
Why was the fire allowed to go out?
because the hunters were all up and tarted up and they ran of to kill a pig.
I must prove that I am more powerful than jack and his band of people. I must maintain control
It is too short, you don't have any vocab words, and you need to capitalize the characters names. Its good but it could use some work.
ReplyDeleteI thik this is good. You need to make it longer and dont put the questions in it, it makes it somewhat confusing to read. Other than that it is good.
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